Fakebook:Tom Buchanan

Thursday, December 6, 2012

Janie's Life Sorrows

Janie poor girl trying to find a place
she is so capricious
Has to make a decision now
she can't keep living like this anymore.
All alone in the world
She belongs to no fold
Treated like trash
and acted to rash.
Thought marriage was love
but now wishes to fly as a dove.
She is silenced and dominate
but she will not break.

She looked for love
but found sorrow instead.
Will she ever find true happines within?




7 comments:

  1. What is capricious maybe you should replace it with a more understandable word. Other then that good blog John

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    1. It is an SAT word, it means people that are hot-and cold, can't make up their minds.

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  2. i like how you ended it with a question to make the audience think and i liked how it rhymed

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  3. I agree with your points, and your poem is structured very well.

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    1. Thank you, they were just random thoughts glued together. :)

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  4. Depending on what she wants in a man, will she then find her love.

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    1. No, she won't unless it's a young man without machismo ideals, that fulfill her emotional needs.

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